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[杂文] 读完小步作品《武林客栈》上部了

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发表于 2007-3-15 19:33:00 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
中午读完步非烟代表作《武林客栈》上半部“日曜卷”,瞎聊几句——
   文字风格与沧月的完全不同;(偶喜欢沧月的文字,透着江南才女的秀丽!小步是北大才女,但文字不是偶喜欢那种,不过绝不是说其文字不好。)
   情节构思上,沧月的故事能打动人,小步的故事看着不烦腻~!(《客栈》上半部里有几个故事还是挺有吸引力的。)
   人物刻画上面,小步笔下的人物就有点苍白了,少了些荡气回肠!
   客栈人物:玉手神医李清愁,一个刻意描写的侠客;剑神郭敖,除了剑法高超之外,看不出其他特点了,偶对其有兴趣的是为他专门设计的困局,希望有个较为满意的答案;凌抱鹤,小步笔下最下功夫的人物了,迷一样的身世,悲惨的一生加上神奇的不死神功和琴棋书画佳公子和变态狂魔、断肠人多种情况集合而成的一个人,有意思!捕头铁恨,模仿四大名捕的痕迹太浓了!
   就灌到这吧![em14]
雪中字,神之右手,回首百年身;
墓里魂,魔之左手,我生君已老。
皇天之上星盘已乱,后土之下山河永寂。

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但是感觉上 小步 好像更注重整体感,而仓月则 偏重细节。( 随便说说阿)
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雪中字,神之右手,回首百年身;
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